发布时间 : 星期一 文章英语四级--高分作文思路及模板更新完毕开始阅读e6d183c09ec3d5bbfd0a74df
1）不需要体现动作的执行者
We should pay more attention to the elderly who had devoted their youth and energy to our country. 优化：More attention should be paid to the elderly who had devoted their youth and energy to our country. 2） 需要强调动作的承受者
The employee elected Mr. Li chairman of the committee last week.
优化：Mr. Li was elected chairman of the committee by the employees last week. 3） 保持陈述对象的一致，以求行文通顺
When the Prime Minister arrived at the airport, hundreds of reporters surrounded him immediately.
优化：When the Prime Minister arrived at the airport, he was immediately surrounded by hundreds of reporters. 2 被动变主动
1）需要体现动作的执行者
If you are friendly to others, you will be held hospitable attitude towards by them and vice versa. 优化：If you are friendly to others, they will hold hospitable attitude towards you and vice versa. 2）保持陈述对象的一致，以求行文通畅
One very important quality developed by many individuals during a first job is self-reliance. This quality was cultivated by me when I was allowed by my supervisor to set up and conduct my own survey project.
优化：During their first job, many individuals develop their very important quality of self-reliance. I cultivated this quality when my supervisor allowed me to set up and conduct my own survey project.
强调句和倒装句变换
适当运用强调句和倒装句可以起到突出、强调的作用，达到较强的效果，给人留下深刻的印象。 Not how much you read but what you read really matters.
优化：It is not how much you read but what you read that really matter. By making good use of the Internet we can make a difference in our life. 优化：Only by making good use of the Internet can we make a difference in our life.
非谓语和从句变换
非谓语动词包括不定式、动名词、现在分词和过去分词。使用非谓语动词可以在有限的空间表达更多的信息，使句子结构紧凑、逻辑严谨。
1. It must be realized that people should be cautious when they decide which books they should choose to read since if they read bad books, it will be time-wasting and harmful. 优化：It must be realized that people should be cautious when deciding which books to read since reading bad books is
time-wasting and harmful.
2. The advanced technology and competitive society call on us college students to keep up with the latest development in
science so that we will not be eliminated. 优化：The advanced technology and competitive society call on us college students to keep up with the latest development
in science so as not to be eliminated.
松散句和掉尾句变换
原文：That living together offers an excellent chance of cooperation is one incomparable advantage. Planning a party
single-handedly may be a boring and difficult job. Our roommates’ help makes it enjoyable and easy. We may do anything perfectly, combining every member’s wit and talent together.
优化：One incomparable advantage is that living together offers an excellent chance of cooperation. Planning a party
single-handedly may be a boring and difficult job. Our roommates’ help makes it enjoyable and easy. Combining every member’s wit and talent together, we may do anything perfectly.
比较句变换
1 表示相似性
1）just as …, so… （正如…, …也一样）
Just as food is necessary to life, so are books to our spirit. 2）share/ have … in common （在…方面有共同点）
China and the U.S.A. have some interests in common in foreign trade area. 3) bear similarities/ resemblances to … （和…具有相似之处）
Lots of ancient Chinese constructions bear striking resemblances to that in other parts of the world, which discloses the similarity in human civilization.
4) the same is true of / with … (…也是如此)
People who are financially independent will be bullied by the rich ones. And the same is true with countries. 5） vice versa / the reverse is true （反之亦然）
If you are friendly to others, they will hold hospitable attitude towards you and vice versa. 6）as…as… （和…一样）
Some of the doctors are paid almost twice as much as the nurses.
7）no less (…) that （不比…少/差） / no more (…) than （不比… 多/强） The father is an ambitious man; the son’s ambition is no less than the father. 2. 表示差异性
1）… the opposite of … （…恰恰与…相反）
He hopes that his wife can give birth to a male inheritor to such a large fortune; whereas his wife’s wish is just the opposite of his.
2) …it is just the other way round…. （…，相反, … ）
He is not your friend. It is just the other way round. He is your rival. 3) … different / differ from…… in that … (… 与…的不同之处在于…) His character is different from his brother in that he is introvert. 4) less (…) than (比…少/差) / more (…) than (比… 多/强) More and more people are buying new cars than ever before.
松散到紧凑变换
如果一篇文章只具有意义上的连贯，而形式上比较松散，就很难突出主题，较好的表达作者的意图。为了能够使文章主题明确，句式富于变化，句与句之间、段与段之间都需要一定的连接手段。 1 使用过渡性词语
Walter’s goal in life was to become a successful surgeon. First, though, he had to get through high school, so he concentrated all his efforts on his studies --- in particular, biology, chemistry, and math. Because he worked constantly on these subjects, Walter became proficient in them; however, Walter forgot that he needed to master other subjects besides those he had chosen. As a result, during his junior year of high school, Walter failed both English and Latin. Consequently, he had to repeat these subjects and he was almost unable to graduate on schedule. 2. 使用过渡性句子
Every student will be faced with the same question when he passes the College Entrance Examination: Should he choose a good major or a good university? Answers differ as for different groups of people.
Some students give priority to a good major. What they cherish is a specialty they like most. In their mind…
How to Protect Wild Animals 1）大量的野生动物面临灭绝的险境 2）如何才能更好的保护好野生动物
1 Recently, newspapers often report that in order to get a big profit, human beings are making attempts to hunt wild animals. 2 That causes the wild animals especially the rare species to be confronted with extinction. 3 Therefore, it is high time that we paid more attention to how to protect wild animals.
4 We can adopt the following ways to reduce the hunting of wild animals. 5 First, every citizen should realize the importance of animal protection. 6 By knowing its importance, people can develop a sense of responsibility to prevent any killing of wild animals. 7 Second, the government should pass some laws which can forbid any hunting of rare animals. 8 Besides, we should establish more natural preservation zones because they can provide a better living environment for animals.
9 It is no doubt that protecting wild animals is of significance to our human beings. 10 It is not a task that we can complete in a short time. 11 It needs our common efforts. [改写提示]
1．将句1的主动结构改成被动，将宾语从句由掉尾句改成松散句。 2．将句3的主动结构改成被动。 3．将句4的主动结构改成被动 4．将句6改成倒装句。
5．将句7中的定语从句简化成目的状语。
6．将句8中的主动结构改成被动，将原因状语从句简化成目的状语。 7．将10的定语从句中的主动结构改成被动，并将句10和句11合成一句。
1 Recently, it is often reported in the newspapers that human beings are making attempts to hunt wild animals in order to get a big profit. 2 That causes the wild animals especially the rare species to be confronted with extinction. 3
Therefore, it is high time that more attention were paid to how to protect wild animals.
4 The following ways can be adopted to reduce the hunting of wild animals. 5 First, every citizen should realize the importance of animal protection. 6 Only by knowing its importance can people develop a sense of responsibility to prevent any killing of wild animals. 7 Second, the government should pass some laws to forbid any hunting of rare animals. 8 Besides, more natural preservation zones should be established so as to provide animals a better living environment. 9 It is no doubt that protecting wild animals is of significance to our human beings. 10 It is not a task that can be completed in a short time, which needs our common efforts. Online Dating
1) 网上约会越来越普遍 2) 这种现象产生的原因 3) 你对这种现象的看法
1 With the widespread use of Internet, online dating has become a trend. 2 This has been brought into focus. 3 Many people, especially youngsters are in favor of this kind of dating.
4 There are many reasons accounting for this tendency. 5 First, online dating can be very
cheap. 6 Before you decide to meet, you only can talk to each other. 7 You needn’t spend more money for each other except on-line fees. 8 What’s more, you can’t see each other in person so you will not feel much pressure. 9 Besides, by Internet you can get to know some persons from different cities and different countries.
10 However, dating on the Internet can be potentially deceptive or even inherently risky. 11 The others will tell you who they are and what they are like. 12 That is all you know about them. 13 This may lead to a good deal of blind trust. 14 There are many reports about many people, especially young girls, who have been cheated because of on-line dating. 15 All in all, I hold that people should be careful in deciding whether they should begin a cyber dating.
[改写提示]
1. 将句1和句2合成一句。 2. 用all that…结构改写句6。
3. 将句6和句7合成一句。将句7改成非限制性定语从句，并将其谓语改成cost sb. sth. 的结构。 4. 用since改写句8，将原句的主从句内容颠倒位置。
5. 用offer sb. the chance 结构改写句9，并用even改写and连接的并列句词短语。
6. 将句11、句12和句13合成一句。句12改写成主语，句11改写成表语，句13改写成非限制性定语从句。 7. 用动词report的被动式来改写句14。
8. 用couldn’t be too …（再…也不为过）结构改写句15。
1 With the widespread use of Internet, online dating has become a trend，which has been brought into focus. 3 Many people, especially youngsters are in favor of this kind of dating.
4 There are many reasons accounting for this tendency. 5 First, online dating can be very cheap. 6 Before you decide to meet, all that you can do is to talk to each other which costs you nothing except online fees. 8 What’s more, you will not feel much pressure since you can’t see each other in person. 9 Besides, Internet offers you the chance to get to know some persons from different cities, even different countries.